Beary is the teddy bear that I had every since I was a baby. It brings back so many memories. I took it every where to my doctor’s appointment to play with my friend to pres-school, everywhere. I love him so much because when I was sad he keeps me company. My point is that he makes me feel safe and sound. But sadly one day on the beach he got lost so he was gone forever.
Hey! It is Krutika here. I had a teddy bear that I took everywhere, too. But... I did not loose it. See you around!
ReplyDeleteSweta, you did a great job on this post! In fact, I have a few connections with it! I also have a bear I call "Beary", but he was part of a mobile of mine. Also, during my recent visit to Japan, I had a little pouch, which eventually turned into a wallet and then a bag, in which I collected "Yen Coins" as I called them. I kept losing it. I left it at Tokyo Disneyland, Tobo World Square, at a fitting room in the mall, but somehow it always came back to me. I was impressed with how you emphasized Beary's importance in your life. You could improve it by lengthening it. Try to add where you received Beary,and why you loved it and took it everywhere with you. It would also be good if you sort of showed and don't tell. You wrote,"My point is that ..." Instead of this, you should attempt to tie the ends together without just telling the reader what your point is. Overall, you did do an excellent job. What did you do after you lost Beary?
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